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Awesome narrative, ILS..... good job!
When he said ILS that was short for your nick name. All I would add is to avoid such large, unbroken blocks of print, it's really hard on the eyes and makes it difficult to read. Try breaking up the narrative into more digestible chunks, it will improve the flow, other than that a great first story.
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